Its been a really long time since i tried this....

[-X-]

so i decided to start posting here a bit again .... and what would me posting be without a poem .. this ine might suck, its just ramblings off the top of my head .. so ya .. here we goo....

untitled poem

standing ..
across the sea so deep

kneeling, throwing string to the sky,
water alive, she looks behind...

into the past that went away,
a con, a scream, some cheating prey...

poor girl not afraid to make him pay.....
she crys,

she took his life away

Doesnt do anything for me at all.

[CK]

I really hate to criticize creative expression

Soooo I win instead question you...."POET EXTRORDIAIRE"...perhaps thats being a little too generous?

Maybe you could just change it to "POET"

[-X-]

Originally Posted by Freebird

I really hate to criticize creative expression

Soooo I win instead question you...."POET EXTRORDIAIRE"...perhaps thats being a little too generous?

Maybe you could just change it to "POET"

feel free to criticize all you like, as long as its constructive it can only do good .. and i agree with the 'poet extrordinaire' comment .. it will change fairly soon, i just wanted to stick something up there for now...