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Old 19 Aug 2004, 02:01 AM   #1 (permalink)
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A guy commited suicide in my town yesterday on some back road near McDonalds. He was the boyfriend of a waitress at the restaurant I work at. I had only seen him 2 or 3 times, one of these times at a christmas party where my friends proceeded to laugh their asses off about his appearance.

I got inspiration for a poem about it, changed the main character from a middle aged fat guy with a bad hair cut to a girl for some reason, and wrote it with no real rhythm or beat. More of a free write really, with a refrain that is repeated thrice.

I'd hardly ever met you,
seen you twice or thrice at the diner,
Your eyes were so dull
so null

I gave you a moments notice,
nothing more and nothing less
but you were in such vacant distress
what brought you to it?

What did you do that day?
Who did you see, what did they say?
Did you snap on just that day?
Or did it happen long ago far away?
No one except you and your maker knows,
what exactly made you think it?
Then do it?
Go through with it?

Did you kiss your boyfriend goodbye,
did you have one to say "I love you" to?
Or were you a lonely soul?
in an empty hole?

What was so appealing under that sink,
that it made you think
this is it
this is what it's come to

What did you do that day?
Who did you see, what did they say?
Did you snap on just that day?
Or did it happen long ago far away?
No one except you and your maker knows,
what exactly made you think it?
Then do it?
Go through with it?

What did you carry your demise in?
Did you throw it in the back of your car?
Or did you hold it close
to your heart that would stop beating soon enough?

Had you ever been there before?
Was your final place a well known one?
One that you held dear in your mind,
or a random alley that looked just fine at the time.

What did you do that day?
Who did you see, what did they say?
Did you snap on just that day?
Or did it happen long ago far away?
No one except you and your maker knows,
what exactly made you think it?
Then do it?
Go through with it?

Did you think about your life?
About who would be crying this night?
I know that I'm not,
just pondering what could have gone so wrong.

blue face, stuck in place,
personified self destruction
frozen by rigor mortis,
you were identified, catalouged... then buried...
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